Please help refine a presentation -> Aligning Big Bang and Creation

Hello,

Thank you for your time and consideration. I am working on a video which attempts to show an alignment between the Big Bang Theory and the First Day of Creation. I would like to submit this video to the Goodness Reigns Short Film contest. However, first I would really enjoy learning from many constructive criticisms, which I can use to help improve the quality of the presentation.

Here is the link to the video: http://youtu.be/AzRjG6vRxhU

Please share any ideas, regarding improving the script, the vocal presence, background audio considerations, or any other suggestion, which you perceive may help strengthen the quality of the presentation.

I hope you have a great day!